Tuesday, July 6, 2010

In a box

**I wrote this to mess with all kinds of rules. Tell me if you get it~
And if you don't.

In a box

In a box
one can see,
one wall, two wall, and even three;
up above is blocked, clogged, and drab:
white walls, cracked and bland.

They're all ready for shipment
to the designated homes;
matched by eyes, cheeks, and nose;
to be quartered, processed, and closed.

Inserted with a chip,
that dictates what they do,
all the while, specimens roam with no clue.
They control what to eat, sleep, and wake
and say when to be stalwart, spontaneous, and fake.

In a box
they can see,
themselves, one man, two men, and three.
And all around them is blocked, clogged, and drab;
white prison cells, cracked and bland.

But is it ironic,
when you finally know,
out of the box is where you choose not to go?
To splash color upon the walls is unjust and wrong,
when the masses stifle your voice and song.

So then it becomes so obvious and real,
your soul is their sweet nectar to steal.
And now you're forced to do naught but submit,
when they lock you in labyrinth and crypt.

And then in the box
you can see,
one wall, two wall, and even three.
Up above is blocked, clogged, and drab.
Just outside the walls I am watching you,
clawing at the tapestry.

3 comments:

  1. So I am getting that the "box" is humans? And that we are programmed like robots on how to think and feel and act, because that is what we know to be natural and true?

    I could be totally off on this, but that is how it seemed. It made sense too, and since your theme is usually something around that area, I could see that being a way to see this.

    Also, its labyrinth. :3
    And I think your last stanza should say, "and then in the box" rather than, "And the in the box".

    But yeah, I liked it Mister Ian. Glad to see you are still writing new stuff. :]

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  2. So, hurray for messing with the rules!

    This is a wonder composition that I think could actually use less prepositions and conjunctions than you did.

    But liked it, and kind-of agree with Maya on the interpretation. Also, (and I might have gotten this from when I was younger and televisions were huge) but it could be tv's control on people that are referred to as boxes.

    I hope you continue to stretch your bounds with the rules of poetry.

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  3. My little kindergartener imagination just with all of the world with a sack of weed and a pipe with this.

    -holly

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